Opinions on Edmond's story

Your story is quite interesting to me, Edmond. I am not familiar with the Japanese cartoons, so could you tell me what the Ninja is? Which cartoon you get the idea from? I realize that the concept of Naruto’s wizard trial comes from the western thrilling movie ‘1408’. It describes a man who encounters a sequence of supernatural things in the hotel room ‘1408’ and how he escapes from such nightmare. Apart from that, I also perceive that you turn the well-known hero ‘Batman’ into an antagonistic role in the story.

I would like to give some advice on your story. It is just my personal opinions; I hope you will not be offended by them. Firstly, Kakashi sensei and Naruto function as heroes in your story, don’t they? I have read several western heroic mythic stories; all the heroes are honest and honourable. Regarding to these points, Kakashi sensei should not have depicted as dishonest person. This would affect his heroic image. ‘"Um, it's way too expensive Naruto, just buy some fake diamond for the villagers in $2 shop is fine" ’. Besides, you should have looked through your work carefully before posting it here. Although I am not very good at English grammar, I find a lot of grammatical errors in your story. At last, I think Batman should have given some ordeals to the heroes before being conquered by them.